Tuesday 21 September 2010

Essay 1 Feedback

High Level 3 - Roughly equates to a low B.
Interesting read, nicely written. I would say you need to add in about Karl Marx and the revolution not happening because people had become so passive. I would also say something about identity again at the end to tie up with the introduction. Well done.

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